It is often said that the subjects taught in schools are too academic in orientation and that it would be more useful for children to learn about practical matters such as home management, work and interpersonal skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there is a positive trend of improving our life and education play in a vital role in this process. It is believed that education was taught in school are too academic and others think it would be more useful for children to learn about practical training. Who is right?
On one hand, some people argued that academic teaching and practical training are both important education for children. first of all, academic teaching provide profound knowlede which allow students get more detail information in subjects. If student do not study in academic teaching way, business students will not get any ideas of banking and finace or law student do not know about government law which require student to pass before becoming a lawyer. Hence, academic training is realy useful for student who wants to get a high position in white-collar worker in a long term career. Furthermore, practical training also contribute a significant role in education. Practical training provides a short time to study which help student get a blue-collar worker job easily. Recently,there is a incresing number of high school student chose to study practical training in many countries as soon as they graduate. For example in Singapore, student want to become a waiter or waitress they can study in practical training for a month before getting job in restaurants. As a result, students less depend on their family finance.
However, academic and practical training bring some disadvantage for those who study. Learning in academic way require student study for a long time. For instance, a law student must study 5 years before becoming a lawer of doctor must take 6 years before working in hospital. In addition, student follows practical training will not be ensured about the high position in career because most of the job for this training is hand work.
In conclusion, in my point of view, I think both academic teaching and practical training are necessary for children. The rate of teaching academic or practical training are varying attributed to the subject students following.
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Essay evaluation report
and education play in a vital role
and education plays in a vital role
education was taught in school are too academic
subjects taught in school are too academic
academic teaching provide profound knowlede which allow students
academic teachings provide profound knowledge which allows students
If student do not study
If students do not study
practical training also contribute a significant role
practical training also contributes a significant role
there is a incresing number of high school student chose to study practical training
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
student want to become a waiter
students want to become a waiter
Learning in academic way require student study
Learning in academic ways require student study
Sentence: On one hand, some people argued that academic teaching and practical training are both important education for children. first of all, academic teaching provide profound knowlede which allow students get more detail information in subjects.
Error: knowlede Suggestion: knowledge
Sentence: If student do not study in academic teaching way, business students will not get any ideas of banking and finace or law student do not know about government law which require student to pass before becoming a lawyer.
Error: finace Suggestion: finance
Sentence: Hence, academic training is realy useful for student who wants to get a high position in white-collar worker in a long term career.
Error: realy Suggestion: really
Sentence: Recently,there is a incresing number of high school student chose to study practical training in many countries as soon as they graduate.
Error: incresing Suggestion: increasing
Sentence: For instance, a law student must study 5 years before becoming a lawer of doctor must take 6 years before working in hospital.
Error: lawer Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
You have issues on singular/plural. Read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1701 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.003 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.621 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.977 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.364 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 121, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
... both important education for children. first of all, academic teaching provide prof...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 152, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hildren. first of all, academic teaching provide profound knowlede which allow st...
^^
Line 2, column 786, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
... blue-collar worker job easily. Recently,there is a incresing number of high school st...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 796, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ar worker job easily. Recently,there is a incresing number of high school student...
^
Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...study 5 years before becoming a lawer of doctor must take 6 years before working ...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.27688172043 0.247107183377 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.161290322581 0.155533422707 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112903225806 0.0946595960268 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0376344086022 0.0501214627716 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0215053763441 0.0437548338989 49% => OK
Prepositions: 0.139784946237 0.122226691241 114% => OK
Participles: 0.0322580645161 0.0403226058552 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74250946222 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0188172043011 0.0326793684256 58% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0752688172043 0.0861772015684 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0161290322581 0.021408717616 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0161290322581 0.011925033212 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2078.0 1933.35771543 107% => OK
No of words: 339.0 316.048096192 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.12979351032 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.410029498525 0.374742101984 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.333333333333 0.28420135186 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.256637168142 0.203846283523 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12389380531 0.137316102897 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74250946222 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.037074148 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507374631268 0.56093040696 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.8845747846 60.7387585426 87% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.8333333333 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8773543211 49.517814964 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.444444444 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.7743622355 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.814263465372 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 52.1666666667 49.1944974215 106% => OK
Elegance: 2.03658536585 1.69124875643 120% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355558622052 0.332605444948 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0854742437158 0.102741220458 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0532364054009 0.0668466124924 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.487009564825 0.534860350844 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158977834883 0.148594505496 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135693677144 0.134430193775 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102125918723 0.0742795772207 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.368811434351 0.324371583561 114% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0908532480044 0.0638462369009 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269039177381 0.228012699653 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870685369763 0.058150111329 150% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 5.0 1.9629258517 255% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 10.4468937876 144% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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