It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
there has been many statements against the violence elements on tv shows in recent years. it is believed to have brought tremendous impacts to the society as a whole, and the majority argues that this should be alleviated. I concur with such an idea.
To begin with, youngsters especially teenagers are easily effected by the things broadcasted by the media. young children enjoy imitating the images on tv because in their reflections, such images look awesome. For example, if teenagers try smoking or drinking pertain to the actions of a particular actor or actress on the screen, this will turn into a habit. Additionally, it will eventually be nurtured day by day, and will effect the children personality in general.
Most of the tv programs nowadays are criminal shows. Several famous series of films show on tv during prime time like “murder in the first” or “how to get away with murder”. Despite of attractive plots, such films contain many criminal elements which is unsuitable for the young, and they are still able to watch those. By virtue of that, there has been an increase in the number of illegal action on the worldwide scale. like many cases in Vietnam, various teenagers committed a crime as an early age due to the affect of violence movies.
To sum up, for all the reasons mentioned above, I deem that shows, programs or films which include criminal or violence scenes should be mitigated on the screen. Instead, more educational program shall be integrated on the tv so as to educate youngsters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, so, still, as to, for example, in general, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1305.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 259.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03861003861 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74099731722 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617760617761 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7814368701 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2142857143 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161152956286 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533289800604 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338192810731 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10168681898 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336657250696 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.