Một số người nghĩ rằng sức khỏe tốt là rất quan trọng đối với mỗi người, vì vậy dịch vụ y tế không nên được điều hành bởi các công ty vì lợi nhuận. Ưu điểm của dịch vụ y tế tư nhân có vượt trội hơn nhược điểm không.
In the hectic modern-day life, staying physically and mentally healthy is of paramount importance. While some people argue that medical care should be provided by private entities, I believe that the dominance of private hospitals and clinics poses more threats than benefits.
On the one hand, it is a fact that the convenience of the health care system would bring several advantages, one evident strength is its own ward and flexible visiting hours. So the patient would be received faster treatment in medical examination or severe traffic collision cases. Another plus point would plus point have reduced the pressure on state-owned health care institutions in terms of overload of patients and finance. Last but not least using the state of the art machine and good medicine in the treatment process for the patient, As a consequence, was creating a feeling of comfort for patients to restore their health faster.
On the other hand, I argue that the disadvantages of this trend would prove to be more important. First, it has encouraged the discrimination between the rich and the poor, it means that hospital fees are quite high, just for wealthy people while the poor cannot afford to pay the bills and would be denied access to treatment. Second, The hospital was managed by profit-oriented companies, in particular reducing labor costs and hiring unqualified doctors. As the result, the patient was misdiagnosed or not received proper treatment, threatening their survival. Finally, It is intricate to control the treatment process in private hospitals. For instance, unnecessary tests are performed to raise the cost of treatment and earnings for unethical doctors.
In short, even though they offer better service and more cutting-edge medical equipment than their public-sector counterparts, negative aspects of the private providers such as overcharge and unethical staff overshadow the advantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 461, Rule ID: STATE_OF_THE_ART[1]
Message: Did you mean 'state-of-the-art'?
Suggestion: state-of-the-art
...d finance. Last but not least using the state of the art machine and good medicine in the treatm...
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Line 5, column 573, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt, threatening their survival. Finally, It is intricate to control the treatment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, in particular, in short, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41666666667 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90283195058 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603333333333 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2782178054 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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