Many countries and cultures around the world are experiencing higher rate of childhood obesity. In your opinion, what can be done to help children maintain a healthy weight and lifestyle?

Essay topics:

Many countries and cultures around the world are experiencing higher rate of childhood obesity. In your opinion, what can be done to help children maintain a healthy weight and lifestyle?

It is true that the rate of obesity in children in several countries and cultures across the globe has been increasing rapidly in recent years. As this is a disheartening situation, family and society should actively promote a healthy young generation.

First, family should set up a healthy diet plan for their daily meals. Through this plan, children could be encouraged to adopt healthy eating habits such as taking in more vegetables and fruits. These foods are not just low in saturated fat but can also give their bodies sufficient and well-balanced nutrition to effectively work and study. Apart from that, parents should altogether withdraw their children from a habit of consuming junk food as these foods always contain an excessive amount of sugar and fat, which can potentially lead to some chronic diseases like diabetes or even cancers.

Also, governments should give immediate attention to this issue. Given the fact that today children are less active than those in the past due to a sedentary lifestyle, which is the main reason why they are prone to obesity, the authorities should therefore invest in creating more playgrounds so that children will have greater opportunities to engage themselves in outdoor activities. It is also notable that unhealthy food advertisement are now intentionally targeted in children, causing fake hunger signals for unneccesarily nutritous food consumption. To tackle this problem, governments should impose higher tax on such foods and at the same time, set strict regulations on food advertisement aimed at children.

In conclusion, parents and governments should jointly held responsibility for childhood obesity prevention.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, therefore, well, apart from, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45419847328 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93629553662 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664122137405 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9113579335 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.909090909 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121232880101 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459813741914 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337762602578 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0737307570837 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031398630997 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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