In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the government's responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is widely believed that the primary reason behind childhood obesity and illness could be the lack of government effort and policy. While this assertion is reasonable to some extent, I would contend that it is the parents’ responsibility that plays a decisive role in dealing with these health problems since they are the primary guardians of their children.
It is valid to assert that government should take responsibility for addressing the problem of child obesity. The laws and policies enacted widely over the country can promote a healthier lifestyle among the citizens and curb the obesity rate among children. By prohibiting advertising and selling sugary drinks and food for kids, the government can gradually change children’s dietary habits to live healthier and lose weight. This is evident from the fact that the Vietnamese government has promulgated an official instruction on the local primary schools to provide fresh and low-fat school meals for children and encourage them to participate in more physical activities. Thanks to this legitimate effort, the Vietnamese obesity rate among children has been successfully curbed in the last 15 years.
However, besides the government, parents should shoulder the burden of solving the health problems of children as well. As parents are the primary guardians who take responsibility for feeding and taking care of their kids most of the time, they can completely monitor their children’s diet and physical exercise routine. Moreover, due to their profound influence on children’s awareness and behaviors, parents tend to shape their kids’ dietary and exercise habits. By following their parents’ daily routines, children often share the same eating preferences and exercise commitments with their parents. To give an example, a recent survey has reported that the frequency of consuming fast food by European children is 73% similar to that of their parents. Therefore, to improve their children’s physical health and prevent their children from ailments associated with obesity, it is necessary for parents to directly assume their responsibility as primary guardians and rectify their own habits of eating and exercise.
In conclusion, while the government should take the leading role in tackling the issues of child obesity and poor health conditions by enforcing the law, I strongly believe that parents should also share this responsibility as they are more accountable for their kid’s health.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 383.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51697127937 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85769728061 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516971279373 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.4116959216 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.928571429 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3571428571 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122152248485 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05024101523 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222202416398 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080369389216 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026454028473 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 13.0946893788 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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