In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility? What are you opinion on this?
There is an argument that centres on children employment by which it is negative effects on youngsters or valuable practice for them. Even though some people believe that this tendency would bring harmful circumstances for students who need to be concentrated on their school learning, in my opinion, I suppose that it could be beneficial experiences for them.
To begin with, there are some people who hold the view that schoolers should not be involved in some of the paid jobs. there are several reasons but the most conspicuous one is perhaps that young children would be exploited by corrupt dealers since they have a lack of power and knowledge about work policies. On top of that, they could be exposed to severe violence affairs when they perform financial activities because they are still immature to thrust temptation away. As a consequence, when youth run into economic actions, they are possibly employed by dangerous adults and they could be experienced physical and mental depressing incidents according to their young age and undeveloped thought. Take South Korea as an example, a plethora of teenagers apply for part-time jobs when their school holiday; but a number of them could not receive the correct payments from the employers, and they have a lack of ideas to solve this problem since they are out of ages protected by employment rules.
Despite the aforementioned argument, I strongly suppose that there are numerous benefits when young people engage in working environment in their early ages. The first reason is that they are able to recognise the importance of money that is made by their parent's blood, sweats and tears. This is evidenced by the fact that children who have experiences of part-time would know how to save money since they realised it is hard to earn; however, teens who are always in mom's hug would not interested in those issues and they would take advantages from their parents as much as they could. Besides, working children could learn many useful skills from their working environments such as cooking skills, communicating skills and problem-solving skills which could build up their future careers. Finally, these students could have more opportunities to choose their majors or professions earlier than others since they could practice beforehand whether the fields are suitable for them or not.
In conclusion, although some people insist that it is ineffective for children to work as a labour force, in my point of view, I am convinced that it would be quite worth experiences for them, owing to the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...hat schoolers should not be involved in some of the paid jobs. there are several reasons bu...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...t be involved in some of the paid jobs. there are several reasons but the most conspi...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'interest'
Suggestion: interest
...ns who are always in moms hug would not interested in those issues and they would take adv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, so, still, as to, i suppose, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 7.30460921844 301% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 426.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08685446009 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.673787235 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539906103286 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9967243336 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.692307692 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7692307692 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192385208611 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762700895356 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547475188976 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139878125958 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349657439164 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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