In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your opinions on this?
Children are increasingly taking part in paid voluntary work in different parts of the world. While I agree that learning and experience is promising through this, it can also distract the children from their studies, which is most crucial for their career. This essay will discuss that why children are better off to focus more on their education than involving with any occupation.
On the one hand, Working can instill the children with different skills and abilities. During the job, the children interact and deal with different people, which does not only improve their communication skill, but also enhances their confidence as well. To exemplify, my nephew was unable to even talk with someone in the past, but since he had started a job, he is now more confident and easy to speak in the gathering. In addition, if the children start working from initial days, they will realize the worth of money and become more responsible about their investment. Hence, growth is guaranteed as a result of working, which can have long-lasting impacts on children life.
On the other hand, encouraging the children towards paid jobs, will adversely affect their studies. Some children are not good with multi-tasking due to which carrying out both duties at the same time will be daunting and stressful for them. As a result, their focus will break and they will spent most of their time on the job. The survey conducted in the primary school in USA found, that students who were working along with study had lower grades as compared to those who were not involved in any occupation. Moreover, children are naïve and innocent, and it is likely that they are to be used by criminals for the suspicious activities for few extra bucks. Due to this reason, their whole career will be deteriorated and they might not find the way back in.
In conclusion, either children should be encouraged to earn money or not is a controversial issue. It is undeniable that the working children will be more skillful and better in carrying out their responsibilities; however, their studies might also disrupt as a result. I believe that literacy is indispensable and it is the area where all of the energy should be invested on, though sharing it with work is not advisable at all.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...le I agree that learning and experience is promising through this, it can also distract the ...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...t, their focus will break and they will spent most of their time on the job. The surv...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... indispensable and it is the area where all of the energy should be invested on, though sh...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90649350649 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64573983632 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54025974026 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1489247348 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.117647059 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164949981704 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593670935815 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415464889311 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112913456554 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516797605775 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...le I agree that learning and experience is promising through this, it can also distract the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
...t, their focus will break and they will spent most of their time on the job. The surv...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... indispensable and it is the area where all of the energy should be invested on, though sh...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90649350649 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64573983632 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54025974026 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1489247348 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.117647059 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164949981704 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593670935815 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415464889311 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112913456554 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516797605775 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.