Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both arguments and give your opinion
It is thought that many nations spend a profusion of money in art, some individuals believe development in art is importance, but other people think investment is better spent on advancing communal services and facilities. From my point of view, in some situation these notions have both benefits and drawbacks for the society. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
First of all, in the industrialized world and with the apearance of modern technology that the propotion of resident who suffer from deppression or other types of physical issues such as cardiovascular disease have increased gradually, so art's investment is greatly significant for the resident's life. Not only does this phenomenon provide numerous social knowledge and valuable experience for the individual which improve their mental life, but also the creative and imaginative abilities of adolesence can be advanced which leads positive effects for the economic background of their country. Furthermore, the socioeconomic troubles will be lessened with the connection of local art collection such as art galleries or public museum. To illustrate, there was a survey by Kevin Crock, the prominent interviewer and professor, who is an expert about the success of postgraduates who understand the value of art. The statistics demonstrate that nearly everyone has got plenty of achivement in their career.
However, we can not negate the drawback of this problems when compare with second notion. If the government pay attention too much on the art's development, the another fields will be forgot such as community health and academic ecucation. Moreover, some researcher noted that the regions also correlate with a wide range of cognitive behaviors, including memory, self-monitoring and conscious self-awareness, so local people will struggle to approach with the international arts, various harmful influence will be led by this habit to the young generation.
To conclude, through my argument from the essay, i mostly agree with the first statement bcause of its pratical and benifical , but it still have some negative aspects for the society. The government need to have clear plans to improve their citiznes for the nation's development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45953757225 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01813733456 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630057803468 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.637339809 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.307692308 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192083816754 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637668104543 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968183150385 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122988645346 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103227218752 0.056905535591 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 78.4519038076 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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