In many countries today, Major cities have become too big and overcrowded.
Why is this?
What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many cities are already packed to the breaking point, even if the authorities see the risks and problems associated with this overcrowding. The reasons for this overcrowding are usually a human desire for a better life. However, the problem of overcrowded cities has to be the responsibility of state authorities.
In my opinion, people who are eager to move to bigger cities are usually people who mostly believe that the opportunities and chances are only in bigger cities. This is especially true for poor people, who cannot see the risks and threats behind the decisions of moving to those cities. The examples of Dubai and Moscow come to prove that about 40% of the population living in these cities have chased their dreams of better life. People who refuse underqualified jobs in their hometowns, eagerly agree to work in supersized cities, believing that one day the luck will come to them.
Furthermore, it is generally believed that the lack of education is linked to the desire of finding best opportunities in bigger cities. People, who do not have qualifications, tend to think that by moving to bigger cities, they can look for increased income and chase their dreams. So, the governments could promote educational programs to raise awareness of the risks and failures people can face in bigger and packed cities.
To sum up, we can understand the desire of people to move to the megacities to find their life chances. However, the authorities can really promote education as a solution to this problem. Thus, education will help these immigrants find jobs and opportunities in own places, rather than moving to packed cities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, thus, as to, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8024060829 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527472527473 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.8248538606 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.076923077 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118647586662 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521402088566 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464319054344 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850623608449 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656203742539 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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