Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experienc

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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Undoubtedly, these days, museums play an immense role in illustrating nations history. There are several museums free of charge for admission. On the flip side, other ones require a fee in order to visit. In my point of view, the former sort of museum seems more appealing to me. Not only would it play an immense role in making people more enthusiastic, but it would also result in increasing people’s knowledge of history.

On the one hand, free admission can be vital incentive for people to visiting museums more. It is often said that nowadays people are more facing obstacles in supporting in supporting their financial issues. Therefore, they opt for having recreations that are easily affordable. For example, according to the recent survey of the Tehran municipality, this year the number of the visitors to the museums during the new-year holidays exceed significantly in comparison with the last year. Government asserts that free tickets are the manifest cause of this escalation this year.

On the other hand, when it comes to increasing people awareness in term of the history, every one asserts that government should take an action with respect to improvement of this issue. Accordingly, the best incentive that would properly provoke people visiting museums is elimination of the admission fees. It is often announced by scholar that mere one visit to museums would positively comprehensively change the views of the people about history. For example, last year I was asked to survey fifty history students of my university by questionnaires. One question asked them ‘what was your mainspring motivation to choose your major’. Interestingly enough, sixty percent of the students mentioned visiting museum.

To sum up, in my personal view, it would be wise if government makes all the museums throughout the world free of charge. Not only would it lead to making people more interested in history of their nations, but it would also contribute to rising people information about the history.

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Average: 10 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'in supporting'.
Suggestion: in supporting
...wadays people are more facing obstacles in supporting in supporting their financial issues. Therefore, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, sort of, to sum up, with respect to, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23926380368 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88503414767 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530674846626 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9212960407 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223422875434 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796591125394 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758608966847 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136258476828 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044568883654 0.056905535591 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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