Many people complain about commercial advertisements and their influence on children. Should it be controlled by the government? What are the possible effects on children?

Essay topics:

Many people complain about commercial advertisements and their influence on children. Should it be controlled by the government? What are the possible effects on children?

Nowadays advertising brochures, posters, television spreads a lot of promotional items. We cannot deny the fact that minors fall under the pressure more often than anybody else. Some people claim that marketing should have a framework in distribution some products because of negative consequences. And should it be limited by the state?
Fist of all, children don’t have a clear understanding of the profitable purposes for the advertisements, their desires are under marketing control. This problem has an explanation that they are guided by colourful pictures, signage and slogans on the package. For instance, ice cream with popular cartoon character on the package is in a higher demand.
The next reason is that it can lead to serious problems with health, bad eating habits.Statistics show that diet-related illnesses among young people are on the rise. The problem consists in paying attention of child on harmful food by advertisement, for example: hamburger, sweets, crackers, which are high in fat, sugar and salt. As an example, a big number of american teenagers suffer from obesity, heart disease, diabetes.
Furthermore, parents have to spend more money on things their children want, which are not necessary at all. The reason being it leads to extra cost for family budget, but some families can’t afford additional expenditure.
In conclusion, promotional companies need to be regulated by the government structures, otherwise it can damage children’s rights to be independent in their choice and ability to formulate defense mechanism in perception of the advertisement.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52226720648 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14666330326 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.68016194332 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3286287005 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.923076923 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172201725692 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531776409292 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574431349139 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898821435483 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465680613007 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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