Many people say that family is the most powerful influence on a child’s development. However, some people suppose that other factors (such as music, friends,…) have a great influence on children.” Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Having lots of factors that exert an impact on a child’s development which has still been a subject of heated debate. Some people think that families are a place, where has the greatest influence on children, but others believe that have many other reasons such as music or friends which is the most effect on a child’s development. In my opinion, both of family and music or friends have an effect on children.
On the one hand, some people think that family has the greatest impact on the growing up of children because parents have a part of the responsibility to teach children and they have plenty of time to expose to their children. Therefore, parents often spend their spare-time to guide their children on how to become a good person or teach them studying. For example, children are taught about etiquette and code of ethics by parents at a very young age. This helps children formation the politeness personality. If parents have the wrong way, they will teach the wrong way for their children. That does not only have a bad influence on awareness of children but also influence on a child's development.
On the other hand, others claim that having many other factors that affect a child such as music or friends. As a result, children spend spare-time to listen to music because music helps them feel relax and have a good mood. If children listen to a piece of sad music, their mood can feel not good. Moreover, there are many videos or short songs which exert an impact directly to the appearance and character of children. another significant factor has a great influence on a child’s development is the friend. At school, children always share the same characteristic and interest something in a group. Consequently, children’s thoughts or behavior are much likely to been affected by their peers.
To sum up, although some commentators think that family has the greatest impact on children, I believe that different factors also have an effect on children such as music or friends.
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also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73560752328 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463556851312 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8151041784 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2352941176 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1764705882 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377394486945 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132892744869 0.084324248473 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111472042694 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2576943117 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888379957117 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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