Many people say that we now live in "consumer societies" where money and possessions are given too much importance. Others believe that consumer culture has played a vital role in improving our life.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Material things are becoming more and more crucial in defining happiness. While many people believe that the society is over-estimating their necessity, others consider it as fundamental in enhancing our lives. In my opinion, I firmly agree with the initial opinion.
It is understandable that such people are in favor of emphasizing wealthy and its pleasure. Practical things are one of the key elements of a pleasant life. For example, poor citizens in Africa hardly feel happy because they do not even have sufficient food and clothes. In addition, it is undeniable that money can be an ideal motivation for many people. That is why everyone works hard to earn a living. High salary is considered to be rewarding encouragement for workers to perform their tasks more effectively. Nestle, a company specializes in health-care products, has recorded a significantly exceeding productivity since 2009 when they increased their labor cost.
However, in most cases, people are being too materialistic. Dignity is now being undervalued than estate. There are many who can do whatever it takes to be wealthy. Consider burglars, who have no sense of shame, may even severely damage others to burgle their possessions. Moreover, there is much injustice due to one’s social background. Sometimes, wealthy people are favored than poor ones in view of services’ quality, although they both spend the same amount of money. A Harvard survey conducted in one thousand randomly picked hotels in South America demonstrated that employees there tend to provide better service to customers who look privileged.
To conclude, albeit the sense of materialism is motivating social’s development, I believe sometimes they are being over-used.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'believe'.
Suggestion: sometimes believe
...motivating social's development, I believe sometimes they are being over-used. ...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eve sometimes they are being over-used.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, moreover, so, while, for example, in addition, in most cases, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45387453875 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0742104687 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664206642066 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.118252189 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1111111111 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0555555556 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152339955109 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439133871232 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451681351495 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913299411197 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396517594629 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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