More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items.
What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Recently, it is true that the people’s demand of buying well-known brands of clothes, cars and other items has been increasing sharply. While it is attributable to some reasons, I strongly believe it is a negative development.
There are two compelling reasons for people to purchase brands item. First, the marketing department of giant corporations always hire celebrities to promote their goods which make people feel like these products will make their owners more luxurious and fashionable so that customer can be easily swayed by advertisements. For example, Jisoo BLACKPINK - a member of renowned girl group in Korea is employed as the ambassador of Dior, and due to her distinguished appearance, all clothes which she wears become more gorgeous, which makes people think these brand clothes are wonderful and want to squander for them. Another cause is the people’s desire of show their wealthy through material possessions they have. For example, by owning Bugatti La Voatio Noire - the most expensive car in the world which costs 18,9 million USD, everyone can simply understand its holder’s prosperity.
There are some obvious proofs to prove that this trend is a negative development. First, the target audience of advertisements usually is the youth who are not able to earn money on their own to buy renowned brands products. In fact, many quarrels in families are created by the excessive requirements of children about goods and the disagreement of parents so that it can be said some brand goods make a adverse impact on family bound. Second, if people substitute a non-brand product for band one with same quality, they can save money for other meaningful purposes especially charity. Finally, some people do not have enough finance to meet their demand and in lieu of trying the best to earn money, they steal from others or do something else which are illegal, which lead to the rising of crime rate.
In conclusion, although the trend of purchasing famous brand items seems reasonable, I believe it is a adverse development for people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1735.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14836795252 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77260401743 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623145400593 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.0659523444 49.4020404114 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.461538462 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9230769231 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263529347939 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865481352289 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619091751438 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154880565666 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309221298136 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.