More people put their personal information online e q address telephone number for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes is this positive or negative development

Essay topics:

More people put their personal information online (e.q address, telephone number) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes , is this positive or negative development?

It is tangible that, these days, people around the world have become increasingly depending on technology, and they have been willing to put their private information online so as to assist their everyday’s communication need and personal purposes. Though, there will be a few drawbacks, I would contend it is positive progress.

On the one hand, there are various benefits of exposing private information on social networks to help ones need of socializing and banking issues. To begin with, by posting our own information to online can help us in many ways, for example, if we are doing business on social platforms such as Facebook or Instagram, the customers will be able to access to our details instantly without making a contact to us which could take a bit of time. In the past, people would have to make a phone call or send an email to partners if they wanted to have a conversation with them, thus it is utterly convenient for us to expose our private details on social media for reasonable purposes. In addition, when it comes to banking purposes, people have to put their personal details online as a requirement of the banking process. Instead of going directly to the bank to fill out the personal form, people merely need to turn on their phone and do it at home which saves a plenty of time.

On the other hand, there will be a likelihood of encroaching personal information. It is undeniable that when people make their private details publicly on social platforms, they will likely to be infringed upon their private information by those greed individuals, these people will use the other's information to satisfy their bad purposes. Given the evidence that, there were many incidents occurred in the past, when an individual's information being used illegally by a third party or a hacker, whatever its purposes for advertisement or deceitfulness. The individual that being targeted would be constantly disturbed either by telephone or message, which they had no idea that they were exploited and infringed upon their private lives.
In conclusion, despite some minor negative effects, I would like to reiterate by saying that the tendency of putting our personal information online will do wonders for us.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (22 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...to put their private information online so as to assist their everyday’s communication n...
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Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...nformation online so as to assist their everyday’s communication need and personal purpo...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 500, Rule ID: SEND_AN_EMAIL[1]
Message: Consider using 'email'.
Suggestion: email
...ople would have to make a phone call or send an email to partners if they wanted to have a co...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
... individuals, these people will use the others information to satisfy their bad purpos...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 424, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...incidents occurred in the past, when an individuals information being used illegally by a t...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, third, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99463806971 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81868265907 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517426273458 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.1193714986 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.307692308 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6923076923 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296440365301 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106097742495 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611867779106 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172318506065 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508247847856 0.056905535591 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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