Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common for people to provide their personal details online. Although this practice might facilitate a smoother user experience, I believe the trend is negative as people will likely be vulnerable to cyber-crimes.
On the one hand, updating personal information online contributes to a superior experience for online shoppers. By associating personal details with exclusive accounts, consumers can make more convenient online purchases. This is clearly exemplified when people shop on e-commerce platforms such as Amazon or E-bay. Because their identity information has already been synchronized with their sign-in accounts during the first registration, customers can skip the time-consuming sign-in step and transfer immediately to the final step of making a transaction.
On the other hand, posting personal data on the Internet makes users potentially susceptible to criminal activities. The private information shared online including one’s names, addresses or social security numbers can be exploited for illicit purposes such as financial fraud. For instance, a hacker known as “Hieu PC’ in Vietnam ran one of the Internet’s most profitable and popular services for selling stolen identity records. He utilized his social engineering degree to exploit a wealth of vulnerable consumer data, stealing thousands a sheer volume of social security numbers and reselling them on an anonymous broker’s online platform. This led to a large number of retired workers in the United States losing million-dollar pensions to a sophisticated online hacking scheme.
In conclusion, in spite of some relatively minor conveniences, registering personal details online is a negative development considering the increased risk of online fraud. In my opinion, governments should take resolute actions to mitigate security risks and better secure personal identity information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.93501805054 5.12529762239 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12942879099 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657039711191 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9039108023 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.461538462 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326539714442 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102854551507 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610220116936 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168823255389 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490287988437 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.17 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.12 8.58950901804 129% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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