Multinational corporations have facilitated the rise in the standard of living and economic stability in many developing nations. However, the effects of this influence have been more negative than positive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Recent decades have witnessed tremendous achievements in the field of business, especially worldwide enterprises. While there can be no doubt that these firms can be beneficial to society in some ways. I am of the opinion that multinationals have brought more harm than good.
Although a multinational corporation often brings people more job opportunities as many new factories were built , it cannot be denied that it also makes them vulnerable to economic decline. The fact that local competing firms that are squeezed out of business is increasing because they weren't able to compete with large multinationals that have superior equipment, as well as greater supplies. Indeed, some of these foreign corporations are national monopolies.
Another danger of worldwide enterprises' influence is how they affects cultures. While it creates sense of community that crossing international borders, it also creates a reduction in cultural identity. Therefore, in order to increase their revenues, some firms imposed their own way of life on other societies by the power of advertising and promotion. Furthermore, because these corporations are able to expand quickly to other countries, the conservation of limited natural resources is rather insignificant as they can immediately relocate to another area once the raw materials have run out.
In conclusion, society has become a "slightly less lovely" place regarding the adverse features of multinationals. While the influence of global businesses will continue to bring more jobs and uniting different people regardless of international boundaries, nonetheless, the damage that results from nation economic recession, cultural homogenization and its consequential impact on local natural resources will, I fear, likely to outweigh the benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77153558052 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27360041532 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65543071161 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.9801880109 49.4020404114 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.416666667 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137524229897 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048746095945 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507143136193 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823146166072 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419862138854 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 50.2224549098 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.