Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor
It is convienced that recently, many people suffering from diseases want to use alternative medicines and treatments than consulting their problems with doctors. I totally agree that it would bring lots of negative impacts.
As an explanatory paragraph, the main benefit for trusting it could create several drawbacks is several citizens could avoid misdiagnosis. It is because they receive the right diagnosis from a doctor or a spesialist so they could overcome their health problems. For the model, lots of people got the wrong treatment such as massages to solve their fracture and in the next day, it become worst than before, and after it, they would bring it to the doctor but it was too late. It means, this activities make our circumstances are getting worst and we must be smart to face it.
Nevertheless, there are several disadvantages if a few people did not want to visit the doctor for their health problems. Firstly, the children who have parent that like to consume alternative medicines would duplicate the parent’s habits which bring another complications in their bodies. It caused by children are always duplicating the activities of their parent. For instance, when the parents consume a citrus before eat because they believed it could overcome their gerds, but actually, their gerds are getting worst in the next weeks as it is too acid for stomach. As the result, all of the family member gain gerds in the next month. So, it is better to talk with the person who know more about health. Secondly, the people who are getting sick would be never know about their illness. It caused by they are never talking to the paramedic that could help them properly so they did not know the actual condition of their bodies. As proof, a woman that feels pain in her stomach is given some traditional medicines by her parent even she did not know about the disease in her body and she would blame herself when it would be getting worst. Thus, the situation would be uncomfortable for every single person surrounding it, especially for the victim.
To sum up where my track, it is necessery for consulting the health problem with the expertist as a doctor to avoid several dangerous situation even death of people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87631578947 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58387686773 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513157894737 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5567201509 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208054505105 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0715655813576 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739670118124 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145855892449 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425352161224 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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