In modern times, many people have tried alternative medicines and treatments to cure their illnesses, and refused to see their family doctors. In my opinion, this is a negative development.
To begin with, the alternative methods might not be tested as thoroughly as the orthodox one. This means that there will be side effect of the drugs that might come up, and harm people both mentally or physically. Hence, ruining people’s health and wasting their money in the process. For instance, Jilly juice, which is a concoction made by a self-proclaimed health expert, had caused many people physical health to detiriorate rapidly since the beverage contains a large amount of salt content within it.
In addition, many people are being tricked to buy expensive, ineffective and dangerous pills. This is because people, who have health problems, want to find an immediate fix to their condition without having to consult with their doctors, and put in the work to improve their health. Thus, they would search online for a miracle pill or treatment that could help them cure their condition eventhough that those alternative drugs are more expensive and might not be effective. For example, people, who are obease, are more inclined to seek out alternative methods such as fat burning pills, which is a pill that people thought was able to burn away fat faster, but in reality these pills are only drained people’s water weight, and also caused them to be severely dehydrated.
In conclusion, people nowadays, are looking for different treatments and medicines to curb their health problems without having to seek out professionals help, and in my opinion, it would have a negative effect on those people.
In the modern era, along…
In the modern era, along with the development of technology, there has been different opinions toward the role as well as the importance of doctors. Some people having health issues prefer alternative curing methods to hospital. From my perspective, this is a harmful phenomenon due to its limitations.
Granted, such alternative medicines or treatments are not sounding solution for health problems. This is based on the fact that a multitude of companies nowadays manufactures mass pills production with inappropriate ingredients and then even fake their functions in order to gain lucrative interests. Therefore, customers lacking fundamental medical knowledge are likely to consume those detrimental drugs, thereby even rendering their status worse. For example, in 2020, Hanoi policemen had detected a case in which a factory called Mai Vu fooled 100 patients with 200 millions VND for a type of cancer remedy that contains toxin substances inside. Obviously, the drawback of this trend cannot be overlooked.
Another reasons to support my assertion is that this development can have a significant impact to both the medical and pharmaceutical industries. The roles of doctors and nurses are being superseded by other alternative means of cure. In other words, they are likely to lose their job opportunities. Therefore, the unemployment rate would increase and a whole society have to face with a problem with future workforce. Considering Japan for example. Until 2022, there has been a decline by 10% in the proportion of pharmacists needed in a certain region due to the healthcare methods at home of inhabitants.
In conclusion, albeit having some benefits, alternative drugs and treatments can not replace the existing role of doctor, nurses or pharmacists regarding its limitations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... not be effective. For example, people, who are obease, are more inclined to seek out a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11428571429 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66588423896 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.4231813171 49.4020404114 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.181818182 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8181818182 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243289738142 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996113456908 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052562719058 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170373800097 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425551288372 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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