Nowadays many young people get involved in criminal activity. Why is this happening? Give reasons followed by examples and suggest preventive measures to eliminate this problem.
In today’s world criminal activity has increased and most of the crimes are done by young generation who are less than 35 years of age. The major reasons behind this lack of education, unemployment, drugs, alcohol etc.
The foremost reason for criminal activities amongst youth is illiteracy. Lack of education results in unemployment. This is primary reason Pakistan is facing terrorism. Un-availability of abundant jobs creates the similar result for the educated youth. Educated youth gets frustrated when they don’t get jobs even after taking sufficient education. In both the cases youth finds doings crime a very easy to earn livelihood.
One of the other reason is culture and environment. These days drugs and alcohol has become very common amongst youth. The outcome of this is that they lose the moral after getting indulged in these activities. Secondly to fulfill the needs for drugs / alcohol youngsters start doing crimes. In both the cases we see a bad outcome of increase in crimes.
This can be solved by a joint action by the citizens of the country and government. Government has to enforce strong laws, take legal actions against the people not following it. Public of the nation has to support this by reporting to police and stopping wherever possible in place of supporting these activities. An equal big action which has to happen is to look at options of creating more jobs both for skilled and semi-skilled population. Opening new industries and getting more work from outside nations will help in fighting against crime. In net taking these two actions will help in making the place free of illegal activities.
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Why is this scored out of 9 ,
Why is this scored out of 9 , why not out of 10 .
Can you provide some more suggestions on how to improve .
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From the flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
2. Avg. Sentence Length: 14.263 21.0
3. Sentence Length SD: 4.843 7.5
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are done by young generation who are
are done by young generations who are
The major reasons behind this lack of education, unemployment, drugs, alcohol etc.
The major reasons behind this are lack of education, unemployment, drugs, alcohol etc.
This is primary reason
This is a/the primary reason
These days drugs and alcohol has become
These days drugs and alcohols have become
Sentence: In both the cases youth finds doings crime a very easy to earn livelihood.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to doings and crime
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.843 7.5
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 271 350
No. of Characters: 1340 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.945 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.559 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 98 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.843 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.105 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.278 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5