Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a negative or positive development?
In the world today, children tend to be under so much pressure to become successful from their parents. In my point of view, this can have negative influences on children. My following essay will discuss some reasons for this situation and also its drawbacks.
First and foremost, there is no denying that this matter deprives from the concern of parents about their kids’ future along with the anxiety for them to succeed. Initially, it is apparent that the young generation will have to face up to plethora of hardships and challenges of artificial intelligence, automation, green issue and the aging population. As a result, parents so much burden on their children for fear that they may not be capable of having a potential prospect career in the future. Furthermore, the usual high expectations and the burning hope of their kids’ success obviously have made each single parent force their children to work hard every day.
Nonetheless, it is proven that children may suffer from many problems when they have to fulfill so many obligations. Having to study very hard at the early age, they may not stand a chance to enjoy a real memorable childhood. Investing too much time to study also means that they are unable to spend enough time with their family and friends, their own hobbies and outdoor activities. Besides, in order to live up to parents’ expectations, it is not likely for them to become the true version of themselves, which can lead to a lot of adverse effects on children’s physical and metal health. There has been a serious scarcity of physical movements causing a rise in obesity and other diseases in the society especially in the younger generation. Apart from that, children may have to struggle with tiredness and frustration or depression. Not only does this cause terrible consequences to the children themselves but it also leaves long lasting influence on the whole nation. For example, in South Korea, there has been an increasingly alarming rate of suicide among students each year due to excessive stress from study and strained relations with family or friends. More clearly, 258 students attempted suicide in 2015 and that number reached a record high of 451 in 2017.
To sum up, I believe there should be adequate pressure as an impetus for children to develop.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, nonetheless, so, apart from, for example, as a result, on the whole, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 387.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01291989664 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74164712206 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586563307494 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7411698388 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.117647059 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271533981611 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820956910318 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648358987138 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184260432396 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574429922036 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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