Nowadays schoolchildren and students are taught to be competitive towards their classmates and aren’t encouraged to help the weaker students. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

Essay topics:

Nowadays schoolchildren and students are taught to be competitive towards their classmates and aren’t encouraged to help the weaker students. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

Competition between classmates is not a new issue, while, recently students are not insisted to help other poor grasping co- students become a detrimental problem in modern world. However, the after effect of such consequences would likely to produce less humanity and mankind. Although competition is good for study time, subsiding helping mentality will become a serious conflict in near future.

On the one hand, students must develop the quality of manliness from the school age. Encouraging them to succeed over other students is good for their education level. Nevertheless, teachers always promote them to help weaker students too.
Similarly, teach them how to improve other classmates level together with their studies would likely to have a good generation in coming years. For example, instruct the top student, how to become a leader in class room and how to generate their ideas to other students for their studies. Such encouragement would produce the intimacy to other students and rank holder could achieve their success in higher level too.

Regarding the human-hood, from the primary age would enhance the students attitude towards the society even when they grown up. Every students should help each other, co-operate in between would be the main qualitative product of schooling. In other words, encourage students not to help other low level companions would develop rude attitude and selfish mind often. Not only study periods but also future times these students would make a headache for the society in any manner. However, encouraging them to help each other from the starting periods of school is a good advantage of the future.

To sum up, rather mitigate the students capability to help others, every one should promote their humanity to others would be a asset of the schooling. By contrast such virtue would get a disadvantage of the school and society as well.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... from the primary age would enhance the students attitude towards the society even when ...
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Line 6, column 119, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'grew'?
Suggestion: grew
...tude towards the society even when they grown up. Every students should help each oth...
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Line 8, column 32, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ture. To sum up, rather mitigate the students capability to help others, every one sh...
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Line 8, column 127, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...omote their humanity to others would be a asset of the schooling. By contrast suc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, nevertheless, regarding, similarly, so, well, while, as to, for example, in other words, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1596.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21568627451 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56622315922 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535947712418 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.2112566186 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.75 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208930562674 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784152654433 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381943516595 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129108370093 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131210251325 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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