NOWADAYS, THERE ARE MORE OPPORTUNITIES FOR WOMEN THAN THERE WERE IN THE PAST
Some people think this situation has caused more problems than it has solved.
What are your opinions on this?
It is undoubtful that this modern life has provided more opportunities for female to take a part in many sectors than in the past. While some people believe that this will bring many problems, I think that this trend will provide more benefits for societies and women.
First of all, the law and policy based on justice which is compatible for woman will massively be created. This happens as without being restricted, female are able to get involved in the political sectors. Thus, they are able to represent woman in order to make and determine some beneficial and friendly policies for woman. Another benefit is the woman contribution for country's development through some particular fields. This is as a result of female participation in the such sectors in which they are used to unable to prove their prticular skills or talents. For instance, many female contribute and enhance the productivity in education, healthcare, science, technology and even economic sectors.
Looking at another perspective, it is true that woman participation in many sector can discourage their role in educating and supervising children at home. Thus, their children will inevitably commit the deliquent activities. However, I believe thet both male and female have the same-essential role in handling and educating the children, and balancing the role in the workplace and domestic should become responsibillities for both parents.
In conclusion, I believe that the wide-ranged chances for female to contribute in many sectors can be good news for all individuals because not only this trend is compatible with human right in equality but also this will bring many merits for the country.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sector seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sectors'.
Suggestion: many sectors
... it is true that woman participation in many sector can discourage their role in educating ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26765799257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91044593498 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561338289963 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7234015999 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.083333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213257580133 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818579932063 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959541552014 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150062032283 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138169260345 0.056905535591 243% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun sector seems to be countable; consider using: 'many sectors'.
Suggestion: many sectors
... it is true that woman participation in many sector can discourage their role in educating ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26765799257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91044593498 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561338289963 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7234015999 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.083333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 7.06120827912 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213257580133 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818579932063 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959541552014 0.0667982634062 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150062032283 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138169260345 0.056905535591 243% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.