These days, the way many folks communicate with each other has altered owing to the technology. Technology has influenced the types of relationships people establish in numerous ways, and in my view, there are both positive and negative advancements.
Understandably, technology has had a strong impact on relationships in business, politics and social life. Firstly, the internet permits companies to hold meetings and discussions regardless of the locations. So the associations in Al Mashaf are successful in expanding the business beyond their local markets, enabling them to gain a wider customer base by maintaining an active online network. Secondly, the blessings of technology like Twitter is being used frequently to trigger protests which can be exemplified by the Egyptian revolution, one of our closest neighbouring nations, in 2011-2012. Last but not least, the majority of my mates use Facebook, where pictures and videos can be incorporated, to make new friends and find pals who share common interests. Ironically, they still tend to interact through their computers rather than eye to eye even though the interaction is unreal.
On the one hand, these developments of technology can be truly constructive. Because in the pre-digital age, the intercommunication among my ancestors were restricted to written letters, which were unquestionably time consuming and inefficient. But nowadays we can keep in touch with their loved ones from any part of the globe instantly and efficiently, saving time and money. On the other hand, social media like websites, snapchat, emojis, and so on are limiting since they do not integrate all aspects of face to face interaction. For instance, person to person conversation is not just about the words, rather the message includes body language, facial expressions, tone of voice and physical touch that are assuredly lacking in the on stream interaction. Therefore, technologically based communication is less genuine, superficial and leaves the users isolated from the physical world.
In conclusion, technology has without fail transformed the communication among people, but not all the aftereffects of this transformation have been outright.
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The essay is not exactly right on the topic.
the second paragraph should be about:
In what ways has has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
we can choose something like:
person to person conversation is not just about the words, rather the message includes body language, facial expressions, tone of voice and physical touch that are assuredly lacking in the on stream interaction. Therefore, technologically based communication is less genuine, superficial and leaves the users isolated from the physical world.
in the third paragraph, it should be:
Has this become a positive or negative development?
we may only choose one side,
it is bad/good, because...
also need to give your own examples:
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1815 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.402 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.148 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.591 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Dear sir, would you please
Dear sir, would you please give me just few examples of how technology has affected the types of relationships people make apart from the above one? Thank you sir.
other examples like:
other examples like:
-the amount of personal time that we actually used to spend on our friends and family has drastically decreased.
-the extent of bond we used to share has also decreased as the quality of one’s conversation has decreased.
-Why visit a friend if you can talk with him / her through social media? This has led to friends being less close, and basically less friends.
-more people focus on their smart phones so that they usually ignore others.
and more...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57142857143 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26761318371 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651785714286 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2439229367 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.8 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168847076346 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0492441252112 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608373377421 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113980997928 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106756282804 0.056905535591 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.32 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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