The obesity rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggestions.
The rate of obese teens is rising every year, especially in various developed countries due to the consumption of junk foods and a sedentary lifestyle. The issue is becoming a problem not just in the family but also in the community. So, this should be given importance so that teenagers will not suffer the consequences of being overweight.
Firstly, one of the reasons that teenagers are becoming obese because of the availability of cheap fast food that sometimes is addictive especially for this age group. Sometimes it is overlooked by parents and the youngsters are having difficulty to understand the possible effects of gaining extra weight that can possibly lead to illnesses. The guidance and support of parents play a vital role so that they will be taught on what foods should be avoided and they should inculcate on their brain the importance of eating fruits and vegetables instead of processed food. For instance, teenagers that are attending classes, parents should healthy meals that will be brought at school so that they will not be tempted to buy from any fast food chains.
Moreover, another major reason that teenagers are prone to obesity because of a sedentary lifestyle in which they prefer video games and television instead of doing outdoor games. A recent study by "The Times" found out that 80% of teenagers preferred playing video games with their friends instead of playing in the park. Due to this kind of passive activities, chances are their bodies will not be active because they are just sitting in the couch and their metabolism will be slower, hence, higher chances of gaining extra weight will be evident. This time, community organization should provide fun learning activities that will involve the presence of youths that are fond of playing gadgets. For instance, during summertime, they should conduct seminars regarding proper nutrition and that should have exciting games so that teens will not get bored and at the same time they will be knowledgeable about the essence of keeping fit to avoid obesity. In this way, they will also understand that being obese will not just have an adverse effect on their physical appearance but also will affect their mental, emotional, and psychological aspect.
In conclusion, gaining weight is not supposed to be a problem if it will not double the ideal body weight of a teenager. However, in order to prevent this to happen, proper guidance from parents and concern citizens in the community should be transparent always so that this age group will always consider the consequences of being obese.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 7.85571142285 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2175.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 428.0 315.596192385 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08177570093 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62525656009 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490654205607 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 506.74238477 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.3952104808 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.0 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100146936473 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04502843096 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411713612327 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734435841876 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276018725515 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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