Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat Do you agree or disagree

it is disputable issue that mothers and fathers should be penalized their children for, they are overweight children. But, this essay totally disagrees to this statement because they do not know what they eat at all time, as well, the lack of efforts to do physical activities is also to blame.

To begin with, parents are not always present with their child. They eat unhealthy food and consume oily or fired food like snacks instead of a balanced food. Basically, in the age of adolescence they do not know what is perfect to eat and what is imperfect. They eat outer food stuff in school without their parents' permission and knowledge and much intake of this food could take form of junk food. The recent survey researched that the total average of primary school students consume of 75% of their daily recommended calorific allowance during school hours.

Moving further, now the children has become overweight due to absence of physical activities. Today's mother and father are providing new technology devices to their children like, computer, mobile phones, video games, PSP games and so on. They get influenced by these gadgets and always busy in use these electronic devices. However, their parents do not prompt them to practice physical activities, sports and games. Also, there is lack of impart knowledge of sports and games between their child so, they prefer to sit at home and not preform any kind of physical activities. According to study of world health organization (WHO) in 2017, 78% of infant in USA who were not carry out exercise that made them predisposed to carrying extra body fat.

To conclude, the parents should not sanctioned to their daughter or son, if they are too heavy because there is dearth in pursuing corporal activities and they consume high fat food in unsupervised period in schooling hours these both major factor are causes to overweight among children.

Votes
Average: 9.3 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49335836524 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596875 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.149934779 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.285714286 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219756254711 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792377143856 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0834359700315 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146769913809 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628196936468 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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