people believe that the government shoud financially support retired persons others believe taht retired people should care for themselves Discuss both views and give your opinion

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people believe that the government shoud financially support retired persons others believe taht retired people should care for themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people intend that authorities are responsible to support elder people financially whereas, others take the opposite view and claims that it is responsibility of elders to take care of themselves. I would argue that financial aid is extremely necessary to combat the troubles arise due to old age.
On the one hand, monetary support is extremely essential in this age. Firstly , individuals in old age suffers from plently of health related issues ,which requires maximum amount of money for their treatment . So , individual’s own finances are unable to handle the burden of these problems. Consequently, government support is necessary for resolving all these conditions. Secondly, most of the children abandon their parents and compel them to go to old age homes. For instance , a research shows more and more old age homes constructed in india every year as, a lot of elder people find on streets with disabilities. So ,living without job at this age give rise to many problems which can be resolved with financial support only.
On the other hand,retired people get a huge sums of money from government on relieving their services. Through this amount they can maintain all their finances and care for themselves. Furthermore , children can look after their parents too . Apart from financial aid , government provides many benefits to elder persons like ,50 percent seat allocations ,half fair prices and many more. Hence, the financial burden is comparatively less at this age than others.
To conclude, it is clear that inspite of having children’s support or funds, retired people do need financial support by government due to extravagences they face at this time because of their health.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, look, second, secondly, so, whereas, apart from, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1436.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24087591241 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87813904294 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602189781022 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5004868887 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7333333333 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215569711521 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685810295965 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645002695882 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148127590325 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324981890422 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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