people today more and more concerned with owning material possesions than with developing friendships and family relationships

Essay topics:

people today more and more concerned with owning material possesions than with developing friendships and family relationships

family: Helvetica, Arial, sans-serif; font-size: 13px; white-space: pre-wrap; background-color: rgb(0, 153, 255);">it has been suggested that these days we tend to prioritize the accumulation of possessions over the development of relationships with those closest to us. some people think that values such as friendships and family relationships have become unimportant and the only significant thing is the amount of money each person has. From my perspective, I partly agree with this opinion, and in this essay I will explain why. Undeniably, in this materialistic world, people tend to admire or envy with those financially superior or who claim desirable positions in various social hierarchies. it is believed that we are living in the pop culture and materialistic era these days, as the public judge each individual based on his/her social status and wealth. it can be seen from how celebrities become famous nowadays. many celebrities are being popular because of their physical appearance and personal wealth such Kim Kardashian. Her reality television program never shows any world class acting quality, but only shows about her luxurious mansions and fancy cars. And then there are other celebrities who are well known due to his/her social status as the son or the daughter of a wealthy family. one of the examples would be Paris Hilton, although she has many bad attitudes, she is still popular because she inherits the assets of her parents. Similarly, one from a affluent family might feel hesitant to befriend someone who is struggling to make ends meet, seeing as the latter is not on the same level with one in terms of social status. popularity of luxury goods is increasing, friends competitive about owning the most exclusive brands. If you visit the Rich kids of vietnam on Instagram, you will be overwhelmed with their hideways with shoes, bags, and dress collection of top brands, supercars, lavish parties. one of their “indispensable specialities” is a picture of long shopping bills with unbelievably huge numbers, even an ordinary person working hard his whole life has not earned it. Actually, they are not fashion salve, however, the more bills showed off, the more competitive and influenced on social network they have. On the other hand, I also hold the belief that it is unreasonable to stereotype the whole society based on the behavior and way of thinking of some people. society is diversified, not everyone is materialistic, it depends on personality, upbringing, friendship groups. From times to times, children are taught that a clean fast is better than a dirty breakfast by their teachers and parents. it means in any situation, although faced with a variety of shortages and money, you must keep your own self – esteem, do not do bad actions. Besides, in fact, some cultures still maintain family unit as strongly as ever. take vietnam for example, nowadays, vietnamese have a habit of living in the extended families contained grandparents, parents and their sons/daughters why they consider family is the major part of life. Thus, they are close – knit and help, support, take care each other which create beauty in vietnamese culture – the piety To sum up, people can become more selfish because of their desire for material things. we cannot deny the certain benefits of possessions, but we should use them effectively, and make our life better with love and care. friendships and family friendships maybe abstract, symbolic thinking (unlike money), however, they seem to be sustainable and meaningful values of each ones.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, then, thus, well, for example, in fact, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 24.0651302605 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3012.0 1615.20841683 186% => OK
No of words: 579.0 315.596192385 183% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20207253886 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.20363070211 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94085462305 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 339.0 176.041082164 193% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585492227979 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 927.0 506.74238477 183% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0398378219 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.38176352705 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229860738996 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504110908144 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396911469459 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229860738996 0.151304729494 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 78.4519038076 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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