The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate the placement of a university’s sports center now, and how it will look after rebuilding.

Overall, we can see at present the university sports center map that they haven’t a leisure pool, that they will build in future plans. In contrast, to the present map, future maps will expand their territory.

On the one hand, to the west of the pool, we can see the changing rooms. Opposite to the changing room, we might see seating. To the south of the reception, we must look at the entrance. To the west and east of the sports center, we might see outdoor courts.

On the hand, according to the plan, the sports center will extend its territory. In contrast to the present plan, they will demolish outdoor courts, and to the east of seating, they will construct sports hall. Besides, to the west of changing they will erect leisure pool. To the north-east of the sports hall, they will add two dance studios. To the south of dance studios, they will introduce another changing room, and with changing room they will construct a café. To the southeast of the leisure pool, they will build a third changing rooms with sports shops.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... maps below illustrate the placement of a university's sports center now, an...
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Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...door courts, and to the east of seating, they will construct sports hall. Besides...
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Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... leisure pool. To the north-east of the sports hall, they will add two dance studios. ...
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Line 7, column 471, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...anging room they will construct a café. To the southeast of the leisure pool, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, look, so, third, in contrast, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 13.1623246493 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 966.0 1615.20841683 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 204.0 315.596192385 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73529411765 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48480097207 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 88.0 176.041082164 50% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43137254902 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 262.8 506.74238477 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.76152304609 294% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7416568805 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.3076923077 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6923076923 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150573748578 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695923694473 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706150287666 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123564109382 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980643009298 0.056905535591 172% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 50.2224549098 163% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.3001002004 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.58950901804 80% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 78.4519038076 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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