The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In the last two decades, the role of women has changed significantly. It is often argued that issues that teenagers go through such as juvenile delinquency, happen because most married women are in employment and are not available to take care of their children at home. I strongly disagree with this point of view, as i believe, research studies have shown that the environment can play a huge role in determining a child's behaviour and the fact that a child's behaviours is largely based on what they see and learn from the media.
Firstly, in this present era most women now have jobs and the idea that this change has caused children to now become delinquents is highly subjective and biased, as a body of research have shown that the environment of a child is key to influencing a certain behaviour. This means that when a child is exposed to an environment with less criminal activities, the child is more likely to shun deliquent acts. For example, i grew up in a good neighbourhood with high presence of police officers, this invariably, had a positve impact on my upbringing such as avoiding any sort of acts against the law.
Another view against this statement is that children mostly immitate what they see on television. In other words, when children watch movies and programs with a lot of violence, there is a tendency for them to copy and practice what they visualise. As a result of this exposure, children can become influenced and engage in unruly and criminal behaviours, which can cause harm and unrest in the society.
In conclusion, according to researh studies, major factors that can cause children to engage in delinquent activities are their environment and the media factor. In my opinion, i believe married women in employment have less of a role to play in contributing to the deviant acts perpetrated by children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, for example, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86392405063 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7999927753 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541139240506 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.527947693 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.727272727 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7272727273 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146006707808 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597966236018 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629118182858 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0901366116613 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606810490746 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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