At the present time. the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time. the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Having a large number of young people in total population is the situation that now happens in many countries around the world. In my opinion, despite some negative effects, it also brings a lot of benefits for our society.
On the one hand, when an area has too many inhabitants in the age of youth, it means that country has to innovate its facilities such as schools or entertainment services to meet their demand. For example, the increase in quantity of students requires schools and universities to extend their infrastructure and improve their quality of education. Furthermore, places such as amusement parks or playgrounds are also necessary for young people's demand of entertainment. Therefore, one of the biggest problems we can observe is that governments have to spend more money on those fields.
However, I would argue that the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages because of various reasons. Firstly, young people are the most effective workers in factories due to their strength and good health. They absolutely bring higher productivity than the older one and so that help their companies make more profit. Besides, the youth are also the people who mainly contribute to the development of their countries. Their flexibility and creativity can be very useful in different fields such as economy or scientific research, so they can help their countries achieve new targets. For instance, nation which has young population like China develops very fast and now become the second biggest economy in the world. Thus, young adults benefit a lot for our life.
In conclusion, I tend to think that if governments can find out the advantages of having high percentage of young inhabitants and make the most of it, they can help their countries become more and more developed by times.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 8, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
Having a large number of young people in total population is the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1520.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11784511785 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82376181868 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579124579125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0333322544 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.571428571 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2142857143 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137631845688 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516120309385 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671267309758 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939264780736 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611674408345 0.056905535591 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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