At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
The tendency of population differs significantly between countries. While many of them are dealing with increased elderly people, some other nations are thought to be coping with considerable number of young adults. In my view, the disadvantages of this matter are outweighed by its benefits.
On the one hand, there is no question that this situation bears some minor drawbacks. The main one is linked to the employment rate, young adults have always been regarded as the core of the society for their crucial presence in the workforce. They possess enthusiasm, passion and large contribution to their country’s economy. However, if the outburst in the number of young people occurs, the aforementioned situation is likely to reverse itself. This trend, without a doubt, will cause heavily adverse effects on the government because of the rising unemployment rate. Additionally, alongside the unemployment rate, the crime rate is expected to rise high as well, the youth have no jobs, they have no money to feed themselves so it is possible that they commit crimes to get money, without considering if it is a wrongdoing or not.
With full knowledge of all shortcomings it may bring, I am still loyal to my point that it exerts several advantages. First off, the society can put aside the financial burden of retired civilians. In many countries which have more old residents compared to the young ones, the authorities have a hard time covering the retired’ welfare and money for their healthcare services, etc. So if there are more young residents instead of their old counterparts, this concern of finance can finally be solved.
In conclusion, the given matter has its positive and negative consequences, nevertheless, the positive impacts easily outweigh the consequences. Every country should not be worried to encounter such a prevalence.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24832214765 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95714324727 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627516778523 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0610092602 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.266666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223005835199 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663138598674 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529138977838 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117541200569 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620081574152 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, thus, well, while, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24832214765 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95714324727 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627516778523 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0610092602 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.266666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223005835199 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663138598674 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529138977838 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117541200569 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620081574152 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.