With the pressure on today's young people to succeed academically,some people believe that non academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects.
What extent do you agree and disagree?
Nowadays we have plenty of subjects that we can access regularly in school. For example; academic and non academic. In addition, it is indisputable that a multitude of student is getting pressure each day to become a successful person in academic.Moreover, It is well known that some people assure that non academic subjects must be exterminated from the school schedule so that students can emphasize more on academic subjects. I strongly believe that I have different views with regard to the statement.
First off, It is essential for us to obtain non academic subject's skill because if we suddenly asked by a person or even our parent itself we can perform it naturally.For instance; I have a friend of mine and his name is Vincent, he is a very industrious person and also have a magnificent intellectual. Even though, his knowledge about science is tremendous and he likes this subject very much, he still learns non academic subjects in our school. He took violin extracurricular in our school, and surprisingly, his capability to learn violin is above average, therefore, he always asked by many teachers to play violin when it comes to school event.
Furthermore, if we acquire enough skill in non academic subjects I believe it also can help us for our university interview exam. For example; when I already applied for my favourite university, I am afraid that I will not pass the entrance exam. Luckily I passed the test and after that I straightly went into the interview exam. I thought the interview itself will ask me about academic knowledge or even environmental studies, but surprisingly the examiner asked me about my special talent and I got surprised back then. Fortunately, in high school I learned a lot of dancing skills so I am pretty confident to express my talent in front of the examiner. After 35 minutes doing interview I feel relieved because I already take all of the process to keep my place in university, and after 2 weeks waiting for the result, I am overwhelmed with happiness because I succeed in my test and I got a full scholarship at the university.
To conclude, learn non academic skills will give you a plethora of merit for your life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, i am afraid, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 24.0651302605 266% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85294117647 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97448927275 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524064171123 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.6374655756 49.4020404114 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.642857143 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263180466414 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946981228829 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793718662279 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171516456047 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910802888224 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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