Developing and buying medicine is expensive and some believe that money should be better spent onn preventing disease from arising in the first place. I do not side with them on this notion. It would be a mistake to focus only on prevention as there will always be diseases to treat and spending money on the research as well as development of medicines is likely to lead to more effective preventative measures.
Preventative actions do not always stop illness from occuring. One glance at the healthy living section of a book store shows that there are various opposing opinions on what to do to keep illness away. For instance, smoking is an identified cause of lung cancer but choosing not to smoke does not guarantee that one will not develop lung cancer forever because the cancer still occurs in non-smokers due to other reasons like air pollution. So, although it is undeniable that preventative measures increase chances of a healthy life, they will never ensure a disease free world.
Instead, to continue funding the research and development of medicines has been proved to better our understanding of the the cause as well as the prevention of a disease. If scientists keep looking for ways to fight and treat sicknesses, they are more likely to find better ways to stop such disease from occuring. For example, while searching for ways to cure a cold, experts discovered that frequent hand cleaning was an effective way to avoid catching diseases but, prior to science, it was mistakenly believed that sheltering from cold wind would keep the virus away. Though it is true that it takes a great deal of money to develop new medicines, it should not be ignored that such investments also lead to more informed methods for keeping people healthy.
In conclusion, prevention goes far in improving people's health condition and reducing suffering but we still are not certain that these methods work for all. Hence, constant investment into research and treatment is always crucial.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9880239521 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65209979679 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568862275449 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.483492706 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.153846154 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6923076923 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161676876236 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064545701633 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043811867529 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102097671595 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531071364781 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.