Q10 : A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. What do you think?
Recently, the issue of animal use has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that animals should be used to meet our needs, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I believe that both arguments should be given equal weight. In the following essay, the evidence supporting this contention will be discussed alongside relevant examples.
On the one hand, it seems difficult to refute the idea that there are a number of benefits that can be derived from the use of animals. Perhaps the principal advantage is that livestock can provide essential nutrients such as protein, allowing us to lead healthy lives. Another benefit is that cures for various illnesses have been developed by conducting testing on animals, which exerts a positive influence on the quality of life of mankind. To exemplify, research conducted by Seoul National University has demonstrated that scientists have been able to develop treatment for heart disease by conducting experiments on pigs. For these reasons, there does seem to be a solid basis for the claim that animal use is necessary.
On the other hand, it seems short-sighted to contend that animal use can be justified. The most oft-cited argument against such a view is that animal experimentation often infringes animal rights considering that it inflicts suffering on animals. To be more specific, animal testing often takes a toll on animals' physical health as well as mental health since the majority of experiments are performed in cruel ways. Furthermore, there is a possibility of catastrophic dangers, which humans can face, arising from animal experiments. This means that a multitude of genetic features of animals are different from those of people. Thus, some results of animal experimentation can not guarantee that these fully apply to humans. In light of the above, I also find these persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, it can be concluded that each side of the debate has its strengths, as discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24340175953 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84295083191 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58357771261 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4627798827 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272479049837 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077983516432 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715328497908 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142808968734 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846021626401 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.