Q17 In some countries the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Q17 : In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Recently, the issue of the age gap between parents and children has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are some advantages to giving birth to children at an early age, these are outweighed by the disadvantages, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.

On the one hand, those who claim that having children as early in life as possible exerts a positive influence on families do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that younger parents are more likely to participate in leisure activities with their children, such as playing online games and football, making it possible for them to build strong relationships with one another. In addition, young people who raise their offspring can communicate with their children with greater ease considering that they are more open-minded than older parents who are more strict due to the larger generation gap.

My opinion, however, is that it seems short-sighted to contend that taking responsibility for becoming parents at a young age merely brings with it positives. Perhaps the principal disadvantage is that a multitude of younger parents often have financial difficulty and struggle to support living costs sine they have not been working for long. Thus, they have not saved vast sums of money, unlike elderly parents, preventing them from providing invaluable opportunities to receive better education for their offspring. Furthermore, the development of youngsters' behaviour is negatively affected by young people looking after their children as younger parents who are generally less mature because of a lack of life experience may be incapable of setting a good example to their children, which can even lead children to become immature and selfish. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.

In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the drawbacks of a narrow age gap surpass the benefits for the reasons discussed above.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29131652661 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84240997446 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591036414566 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.5366075711 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.928571429 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172273131526 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535269444765 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565100198149 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0984104764664 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564584060568 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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