Research indicates that characteristics we are born with much more influence on our success than any experience we may have in our lives.
Which do you consider to have the greater influence?
It is suggested that the inherent character traits encrypted in our genes have more impact on our success in life than any other external factors. In my opinion, I partly agree with the suggestion.
On one hand, there is a lot of truth in the notion that natural talents may solely dictate the level of success one can achieve in his professional career. His unusual ability helps him to work effectively and to complete a task more easily. For instance, Sungha Jung is an artist who has sensitivity to music and is capable of covering a song with his guitar after listening to it once. Receiving recognition for this unique gift, now he is a famous musician with legions of fans and sold-out tours around the world.
On the other hand, I argue that there are other factors that may exert influence on one's professional achievements. Some people still succeed in competition or business or researching, because they are hard-working and committed to their passion without being dependent on any natural abilities. For example, Jack Ma failed to set up his own business over ten times as he was unable to convince investors to support him. However, instead of giving up, he persevered and learned to adapt his business strategies to meet the market's demands. Eventually, his company, Alibaba, began to gain profits and after several years, Jack is now the CEO of the successful company and also the richest person in China.
In conclusion, I belive that while we can certainly benefit from our innate abilities to achieve success, other factors, especially the will to continuously learn and adapt to changes will help us to attain our goals in life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90391459075 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69280522123 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644128113879 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.866313503 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.833333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167140371098 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523204203666 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658175293142 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112376640213 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746243149116 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.