Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has been asserted that the provision of financial aid by the developed nations to the poorer states does not necessarily deteriorate the level of poverty in the region. So, there are individuals who argue that the donor countries should probably consider providing alternative aids to the poor. I partially advocate the agreement part of the statement based on the following reasons.
Firstly, there are other types of aid available apart from financial aid such as humanitarian aids that focus on the general welfare of states, and development mechanisms which are simply to enhance the ability of human capital of the country. The supports may come in the form of educational programs in rural areas, conservation of natural resources, and providing assistance to local farmers. Rather than the cash as the aid, volunteering programs that include people from developed nations, specializing in various sectors would be more beneficial to the local citizens. The outcome may not be short-termed and tangible such as building bridges and industrial infrastructure.
Nonetheless, the aforementioned approach can bring intangible yet long-termed advantages to the local community. To cite an example, educating the people in Africa about the importance of water sanitary through the practical experiments by the NGOs surely did change those people to pay attention to the cleanness of water such as using boiled water and so on, which subsequently lessens the occurrence of abdominal diseases in Africa for the long run.
Secondly, providing financial aid runs the risk of exploitation by who receives the donation. In poor countries with entrenched corruption in governance and overgrowing cronies, the aid simply does not reach even the middle class of those countries, feeding them with a glimpse of a large sum of money. Without a doubt, this fuels the widening gap between the rich and poor in the country and even contributes to the happening of the social uprising in the worst scenario. For instance, the Myit Sone Dam project in Myanmar encountered an upsurging negative reaction of Myanmar people as it was found to be based on the benefits of corrupted political elites.
However, people must be aware of the fact that money is still imperative in helping the poorer countries. This is because the struggles of developing nations are greatly inward and the causes are often intertwined. Thus, sometimes it is a wiser choice for the rich countries to simply donate the cash and focus more on cooperation with government and local mass people.
To sum up, it is totally agreeable that other types of support apart from money should be provided by the developed nations to the poorer states based on the reasons stated above while assuming the financial aid as a reliable choice at the same time.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, may, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, apart from, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 455.0 315.596192385 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87158143783 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545054945055 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 506.74238477 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.2952835084 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.176470588 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7647058824 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242662771708 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690541837732 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600054612909 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120752160102 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0636970520496 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 78.4519038076 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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