rising university fees and scarce of employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that the university should not teach the art subject, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree course that maximize the chance of employment
The rise in university fees and the scarce of employment prospects for graduates have led to demand of better quality in university course. Several ideas have been shown up, but I totally agree with the idea about cutting off the art subjects, like philosophy and history and focus on the practical degree course in university.
Learning art subjects is considered as time-consuming. As for the university students, they have to spend at least one year to deal with all the subjects related to philosophy and history. But surprisingly, few of their respond after learning these subjects said that the knowledge gained to use as an effective tools for their later study in university or be practical in their further career path. Moreover, having the art subjects as necessary ones in the university curriculum might make the students' burden harder both in finance and study. These subjects are hardly attractive to every single students in university, and forcing them learning and paying these subject with the rising fees might stress them out. And, in the end, students just want to finish the subjects by all means which is counterproductive to the students' interest in studying.
On the other, learning the art subjects as a base for the further study in the major subjects is efficient. Due to the time to study the philosophy and history is the first year in university which plays an important role in helping newbies to keep up with the new method to study in their university and learn new set of skills such as analyzing, solving, examining,... However, the time is passed by so fast and the employers demand more about professional skills of employee, the course which focus on practical knowledge and maximize the ability of the students is more suitable these days. The course with the practical materials can ease students to diverse the chance of employment and the industry targeted with shorter time.
In conclusion, I think having art subjects as optional choices in university curriculum and focusing more to the practical degree course can accommodate the wish of students in employment and financing the fees
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to art', 'to be'
Suggestion: to art; to be
...gree course in university. Learning art subjects is considered as time-consumin...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tool'?
Suggestion: tool
...knowledge gained to use as an effective tools for their later study in university or ...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ls such as analyzing, solving, examining,... However, the time is passed by so fas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, moreover, so, as for, at least, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06232294618 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78182930107 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487252124646 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.0810477773 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.461538462 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1538461538 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355878452774 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135979142336 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946317424263 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254282101966 0.151304729494 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911027113437 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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