A society develops the technology in communicating devices rapidly such as smart phones, tablets and other communicating devices. Some people claims that the disadvantages of such device outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As society develops, the technological devices also developed. Due to such development, there are advantages and disadvantages aspects for this device. The advantages for modernised communicating devices can be the faster, easier and convenient aspects which are improving the standard of living for individuals. However, the drawbacks such as psychological and physical damages are inevitable. Therefore, the communicating devices can cause more harm than benefits so that, an appropriate using manner is required.
There are several advantages for modernised communicating device. At individual level, nowadays everybody can be able to make global friends easily and they can contact each other at their convenient time. For the companies, especially multinational and international corporations, are able to contact a various oversea departments by this communicating device which provides the opportunities to conduct a meeting or conference at a shorter time. Therefore, the development of communicating devices is enabling the society to be linked together and can be able to achieve the quality of standard of living.
Despite all those advantages, there are several disadvantages of using modernised communicating devices. The most obvious dark sides of using such modernised device are the physical damages. The apparent aspect can be the hunchback, eye sight, turtle neck syndrome and backaches. Since young people are familiar with such device that they spend the most of their times devoted to such new ways of communication, there are a probability that there are a loss of socialisation skills. This indicates that people are addicted to the modernised communicating devices that they may forget the traditional way of socialisation. This may result in the psychological damage such as isolation and depression. Therefore, the development of communicating devices can be causing several psychological and physical damages that can block the physical socialisation.
In conclusion, it is common to see that the development of technology has enabled the improvement of people's lifestyles. This communicating device development helps people to achieve the task at faster, easier and convenient manner. However, the dark sides of such development cannot be ignored. There are physical, psychological and socialisation damages may block the interaction between people. Therefore, it is recommended that people should aware of the consequences and use such devices in an appropriate manner.
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... appropriate using manner is required. There are several advantages for moderni...
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...eve the quality of standard of living. Despite all those advantages, there are ...
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...e apparent aspect can be the hunchback, eye sight, turtle neck syndrome and backaches. Si...
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... can block the physical socialisation. In conclusion, it is common to see that ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate manner" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f the consequences and use such devices in an appropriate manner.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243309002433 0.247107183377 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.155717761557 0.155533422707 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.12895377129 0.0946595960268 136% => OK
Adverbs: 0.036496350365 0.0501214627716 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0170316301703 0.0437548338989 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107055961071 0.122226691241 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0486618004866 0.0403226058552 121% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.37875067307 2.80594681477 120% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243309002433 0.0326793684256 74% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0997566909976 0.0861772015684 116% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0316301703163 0.021408717616 148% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00729927007299 0.011925033212 61% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2508.0 1933.35771543 130% => OK
No of words: 369.0 316.048096192 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.79674796748 6.12580529183 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20517956788 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.449864498645 0.374742101984 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.382113821138 0.28420135186 134% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.262872628726 0.203846283523 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.208672086721 0.137316102897 152% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.37875067307 2.80594681477 120% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.037074148 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457994579946 0.56093040696 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.6344770655 60.7387585426 78% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0891783567 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.5714285714 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2936500983 49.517814964 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 127.492653851 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.380952380952 0.814263465372 47% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 55.7828106852 49.1944974215 113% => OK
Elegance: 1.90697674419 1.69124875643 113% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470695675935 0.332605444948 142% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108926781444 0.102741220458 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0888453265768 0.0668466124924 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.497751518229 0.534860350844 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123277534952 0.148594505496 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194804187312 0.134430193775 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615536261613 0.0742795772207 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.476136994378 0.324371583561 147% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.061919813855 0.0638462369009 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.360969328921 0.228012699653 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454552471783 0.058150111329 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.