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: A society develops the technology in communicating devices rapidly such as smart phones, tablets and other communicating devices. Some people claims that the disadvantages of such device outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics: : A society develops the technology in communicating devices rapidly such as smart phones, tablets and other communicating devices. Some people claims that the disadvantages of such device outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The improvement of standard of living has derived from the technological development, especially in communicating devices, and which has brought the significant consequences to our society; the comfortableness and convenience lifestyles are phenomenon results. Although the dark side of this development can be severe, the beneficial for this development is more significant than its drawbacks.
A Technology development has brought our lifestyles become convenient. Nowadays, the youth is known as an information age since the information received from the technological devices are massive. With this, people can make global friends and can be able to grasp various knowledge. For the company's perspective, they can easily connect and communicate with the international departments that can provide the opportunity for broaden the companies. Therefore, the communication technology development had improved the way of communicating between people and which has enhanced the standard of living.
In contrast, it is undeniable that the physical damages and psychological damages would be inevitable by using of this device for a long period. The most common physical damages can be the addictions, ADHD, eyesight, backache, turtle neck syndrome and other psychological damages. Those psychological impact would be relating to the social skills which are significantly decreasing for the young generations. It is very common to see that the young teenagers are having a difficulty to physical communication with others without having their technological devices' help. The development of technologies in communicating devices can result in various harmful effects in people's mind and body as well as their social skills, but it cannot remove such device from our daily usage.
Despite all those fatal impact on people's mind and body, the communicating device is helpful in our society. Since the geographical isolation is no-longer disturbing in the people's relationship, people can easily communicate with anyone at their convenient. Therefore, it is difficult to control its usage.
In conclusion, the technological development has enabling our society become comfortable and the standard of living to be enhanced by making whole world link together. Although there are some drawbacks of using the communicating devices in psychological, physical and societal effects, its beneficial is outweigh its drawbacks.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...solation is no-longer disturbing in the peoples relationship, people can easily communi...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'outweighed'.
Suggestion: outweighed
...and societal effects, its beneficial is outweigh its drawbacks.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in contrast, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1615.20841683 128% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.80281690141 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34700285176 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501408450704 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8343450616 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.176470588 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249723235755 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828188815661 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646428631229 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144983302052 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308360318549 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.36 12.4159519038 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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