Some believe children should have activities organized for them during their free time, whereas other think that children ought to plan their own free time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
It is believed by some that it is necessary for children to have their leisure activities organized. Conversely, other people claim that it is in the benefit of children to plan their free time according to their own wishes. In my opinion, letting the youngsters spend their free time the way they want is a more efficient method than other people planning their activities.
On the one hand, some parents underestimate their children's capability of acquiring valuable knowledge on their own. Most children possess a well developed and strong sense of observation from an early stage in life. Only by looking at other people's activities, they can learn, for instance, how it is proper to react and behave depending on the situation they might be in. Studies conducted into this area have proved that self-directed learning and unstructured activities are effective approaches with regard to children's development. A child needs freedom to express his or her inner creativity. Even though parents might think that their children lack playful activities to fill their spare time, they can come up with innovative game ideas in the blink of an eye, by merely combining pieces or materials from various games.
On the other hand, a drawback of allowing children to plan their own leisure activities is the fact that their playing options could be detrimental to their health and overall safety, to a certain degree. Today, there is no doubt that some youngsters spend a considerable amount of time playing violent and inappropriate games on different kinds of gadgets. The games in question might negatively impact on children's behaviour. Moreover, their game preferences often lack physical activity, which is of great importance in the children's development. Therefore, parents must persuade their children that a range of organized activities can be both enjoyable and beneficial.
To conclude, I strongly believe that parents ought to let the children discover the wonders surrounding them on their own and consequently trust their organizational skills in terms of spare time activities, as long as the activities they prefer are neither dangerous nor inadequate for their age.
Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'conversely', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'in my opinion', 'with regard to', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248021108179 0.247107183377 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.145118733509 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108179419525 0.0946595960268 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0343007915567 0.0501214627716 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0817941952507 0.0437548338989 187% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.129287598945 0.122226691241 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0343007915567 0.0403226058552 85% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88164381091 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0316622691293 0.0326793684256 97% => OK
Particles: 0.00263852242744 0.00163938923432 161% => OK
Determiners: 0.0765171503958 0.0861772015684 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023746701847 0.021408717616 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00527704485488 0.011925033212 44% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2184.0 1933.35771543 113% => OK
No of words: 348.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.27586206897 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364942528736 0.374742101984 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.310344827586 0.28420135186 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.229885057471 0.203846283523 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.172413793103 0.137316102897 126% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88164381091 2.80594681477 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.037074148 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566091954023 0.56093040696 101% => OK
Word variations: 63.0712770833 60.7387585426 104% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.2 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7444186143 49.517814964 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.6 127.492653851 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.7743622355 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.814263465372 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 54.2344827586 49.1944974215 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.57575757576 1.69124875643 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378986705627 0.332605444948 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107435242294 0.102741220458 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0842851427405 0.0668466124924 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.513638477218 0.534860350844 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.197372181824 0.148594505496 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14764061172 0.134430193775 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100130594267 0.0742795772207 135% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.390995756185 0.324371583561 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0385421875275 0.0638462369009 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278216291614 0.228012699653 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609476256384 0.058150111329 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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