Some believe that going to college is the best way to a successful career,while others believe that it is better to start working after graduating from high school. Discuss 2 views and your opinion
it is true that many students start their career directly after graduated from
high school. while I accepted that this may suit many people, I believe that others
who choose to start study in the college have more chances to success in their later
career.
On the one hand, there are variety of reasons why people decided to start
their career after graduate. one reason is that they can earn money much earlier
than those who choosing study at university. if you study in university, not only you
could not earn money but also you must pay for your tuition fee, which is took you
a lot of money. Furthermore, instead of studying at the college, they have
accumulated much more experience than others. Each student average take 4
years of their life to complete the bachelor’s degree while in this 4 years, for those
who choosing do not go to college can learn many things only related to their job
instead of studying basic science subjects such as Calculus, Physics, Statistics... in
the college.
On the other hand, many people have different reasons to believe that to
have a successful career, going to college is the better choice. Firstly, although they
can earn money later at least 4 years to people who do not go to college, but after
a few years, their salary increase much faster than others. Most of worker who only
graduate from high school have lower salary than who complete study at the
college after 10 years. Secondly, high-tech worker have more knowledge to
understand the new technologies, concepts especially now is the 4.0 Industrial
Revolution. For instance, Jack-ma, one of the famous billionaire nowadays,
graduated from university and apply what he learnt to build the Alibaba group, help
him earn billions of dollar per year.
In conclusion, I personally believe it is certainly true that people easier to
have a successful career if they graduate from college, but this is by no mean people
can not success if they only graduate from high school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
it is true that many students start their ...
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Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...ctly after graduated from high school. while I accepted that this may suit many peop...
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Line 6, column 30, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
... to start their career after graduate. one reason is that they can earn money much...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...those who choosing study at university. if you study in university, not only you ...
^^
Line 8, column 75, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...must pay for your tuition fee, which is took you a lot of money. Furthermore, inste...
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Line 12, column 14, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to do'
Suggestion: to do
...n this 4 years, for those who choosing do not go to college can learn many things...
^^
Line 19, column 50, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...from high school have lower salary than who complete study at the college after 10...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1690.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 340.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97058823529 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52090910169 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508823529412 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 503.1 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3864274224 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.714285714 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241119517041 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951417444735 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955162928012 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0714919031378 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718230972792 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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