Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones Why is this case Do you think this is a positive or negative development

Essay topics:

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

Nowadays, modern technology is more developed, bring modern devices closer to children. Some children expend many hours on day to use mobile phones. I think this is a negative development and this essay will discuss the reason that why does this happen and why this is a negative development.
In term of the explaination that why brood spend hours on smartphones, there are many angles. One of the most common reason is that parents do not want their children to go out to play but just stay in one place.There are many parents who do not want to let their children go out for fear of risks, so they let their children stay at home, adding a phone for entertainment. For example, my younger brother, he can't go out because his parents are afraid he'll be kidnapped, so they give him a phone and stay at home all day playing games.
In my opinion, this is the negative problem. Maybe some people think it is good, I would say no. Smartphones make children easily distracted in learning, prone to autism, prone to myopia and most of all, they will be exposed to toxic things. There are many situations that children expose social evils, curse words on social networks when using the phone. As a result, they learn from those bad things, go far into the path of sin, swear and swear...
In conclusion, children use smartphones because of many reasons but the main cause is that their parents impact on their actions and their thoughts. This is a bad development because smarthphones make children learn toxic things and have diseases.

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Average: 7.8 (14 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: There
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Suggestion: he'll
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, may, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68518518519 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52859910683 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548148148148 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 380.7 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4520342688 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.3076923077 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7692307692 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348307456303 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117426043627 0.084324248473 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996174825444 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217502646343 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114054888218 0.056905535591 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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