Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Is it a positive or negative development?
Many countries in the world are seeking to attain achievements in different sports competitions by constructing and equipping more facilities for only specialized athletes in place of normal people. I believe that this action can certainly benefit the top athletes and their countries with reputation and rewards, however, the disadvantages of this phenomenon outweigh the good ones.
Building more infrastructure for coaching professional athletes is liable to be advantageous for top athletes to entirely develop their capacities. Apparently, due to the sturdy sports basis, these people could improve their abilities and enhance their skills to maximize their potential. Consequently, they can have their best performances in the actual contests and obtain good results, for instance medals, rewards, record-breaking, and reputation, all of which could contribute to the success of their home country in sports. This can be demonstrated by Anh Vien, a specialized swimming athlete, who was funded for training and promoting her ability in this field. As expected, she got five gold medals in Olympic and other international sports contests, asserting Vietnam’s position in the world.
Although the investment into the facilities for professional athletes is liable to be good for them, this direction could jeopardize people’s health and the credibility of the government. First and foremost, the lack of communal infrastructure could influence the generally physical health of the society. It is apparent that sports are vital to maintain a good body shape and healthy lifestyle, for example, doing yoga to have a sturdy body and exercising to enhance the immune system. Therefore, without qualified facilities, people can hardly do these activities to gain the benefits themselves, which then leads to the deterioration of health in society. Moreover, people will feel dissatisfied and inappropriate when the government does not make an effort to improve the quality of life despite the myriad types of taxes paid. Consequently, this will probably cause protests and strikes, which makes the social order in complete disorder.
To summarize, building specialized facilities for expert athletes could help countries to obtain international sports success due to the enormous potential, but it is not a good method in the long run due to the deterioration of the society’s health and the possible dissatisfaction of residents in communities.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...pacities. Apparently, due to the sturdy sports basis, these people could improve their...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6307277628 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18908136806 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55525606469 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1480444297 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.214285714 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222453246085 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719051677551 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066710210668 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156208379967 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660901419341 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...pacities. Apparently, due to the sturdy sports basis, these people could improve their...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 371.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6307277628 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18908136806 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55525606469 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1480444297 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.214285714 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222453246085 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719051677551 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066710210668 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156208379967 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660901419341 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.