In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.What do you think are causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.
What do you think are causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them.

For government of countries around the globe it is a worrying trend that majority of their citizens health is deteriorating as well as a tremendous rise in obesity have alerted doctors around the world.This essay will demonstrate causes for it and methods to improve the current situation.

To begin with,in this world technology has made our lives much more easier by reducing time required to do certain work and also energy as well.Because of this our life style has become sedentary and this is the major contributor. Apart from this, our eating habits also play a role, as majority of people due to shortage of time rely on fast foods and ready to eat meals which are high in saturated fats and sugars, which not only contributes to obesity, but also predisposes an individual to do various diseases like diabetes, heart problems and stroke.

There are a number of measures both at individual level and at government level to prevent it deteriorate further. First and foremost individual must realise the problem and make drastic changes in dietary practices. For example, eating vegetables and avoiding sugary and fatty diets. Secondly, doing regular exercise will not only help to rise fitness level, but also will protect one from metabolic disorders. Government have a roll to play as well by organising awareness programs about obesity and by building sports facilities and fitness clubs. In addition to these , increasing taxes on fuel means people will use cars less and tend to walk more ultimately having positive effects on physical fitness.

To conclude, though technology have made life comfortable , but it also brought itself side effects ,like obesity and its related problems. But there are ways to prevent it so that echnology can continue to flourish lives in the future as well.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, for example, in addition, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09427609428 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65765732751 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622895622896 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5276705456 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.545454545 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2727272727 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110623131393 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372401932196 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0303365209918 0.0667982634062 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057136524162 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043395680833 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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