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In some countries, children are expected to study more time both in and after school. Advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

Nowaday, many parents hope their
children to have good achievements which would be a good basis for the future of
these kids. So, they think that the children should spend more time on
studying, not only at school but also after that. This has both of advantages
and disadvantages for the students, who are expected to be more and more
hard-working.<o:p></o:p>

To begin with, the benefits of learning
are can’t be negative. The first, the kid access to information by reading,
listening to the lectures, finding, etc. Those are studying. If they use more
time for activities like that, they will get more knowledge, their mind are
improved. Besides, learning gives students chances so a lot of learning gives them
more. Because increase the studying time means the amount of knowledge they get
is more, their score are higher, their achievements are better. Those are the
great foundation for kids to step into life, with the good result, an excellent
transcript, the students can have good prospect and find a job which they want
easier.<o:p></o:p>

On the other hand, that thought has
its own drawbacks. It is expressed in the physical and mental impact of the
child. To pay more time for learning means they have less or even no time for
others as relaxing or physical activities. It makes them feel tired, press and stress
and for a long time it weaken their health. In addition, the learn-too-much kid
usually lack of life skills. They stay among the walls, bury their head in
books, rarely go out and as a result, they just have a little of practical
knowledge, a little of social relationship which are necessary for later life.
In fact, the people who are expose soon have more social experience are easier
to integrate and succeed in life than the ones who study only by letters.<o:p></o:p>

To sum up, investing more time for
studying is good but also is not if it’s too much. Parents and student should reasonably
balance to get the most effective result.<o:p></o:p>

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 28, column 24, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakens'?
Suggestion: weakens
...ress and stress and for a long time it weaken their health. In addition, the learn-to...
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Line 32, column 21, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ry for later life. In fact, the people who are expose soon have more social experience...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, so, in addition, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1615.20841683 147% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 6.6676056338 5.12529762239 130% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.01329286419 2.80592935109 286% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554929577465 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 127.378358027 49.4020404114 258% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 147.9375 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 33.0 4.38176352705 753% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117998146161 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487562267219 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592548537048 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0409919419171 0.151304729494 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663962349237 0.056905535591 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.1 13.0946893788 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 50.2224549098 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.41 12.4159519038 172% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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