It goes without saying that in this modern epoch every organization or company wants to keep their position on top and so that they are using various types of advertisements or offers for promotion their products. To give a clear example, many fast food chains are providing money to schools to advertise their product among school children. I believe that this fund if utilized in a needful manner then it will be very helpful for children and have a positive impact on the growth of both the children and schools. On the other hand, it might have a drastic effect on children health and future, if it considered only for promotion motive.
It is an undeniable truth that fast foods are the well-known risk factors for a variety of health problems. For instance, junk foods are major culprits for heart disease and obesity since these foods are rich in salt, sugar, and similar other contents. Additionally, because of promotions by fast food restaurant or companies children are using these products vastly and as a result of this adults are growing with poor health which can be expensive for the state in the long term. Furthermore, advertising and promoting to children can be exploitative and unethical as they are too immature to take a decision about right and wrong consequences of these things. Secondly, they can easily lure by attractive promotions and advertisements. Lastly, these promotions are also influencing their parents either directly or indirectly because these have an effect on the health of their children.
On the other hand, the money provided by these organizations can be utilized in a different manner such as by establishing new libraries, experiment laboratories or by providing new furniture or other necessary equipment for students. Moreover, children who cannot afford required material for the study that can be provided by these companies.
To conclude, I reckon that it is a good idea to provide money for schools by different type of food restaurant or organization but they should not force children or school authorities to promote their products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a needful manner" with adverb for "needful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...n. I believe that this fund if utilized in a needful manner then it will be very helpful for childr...
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Line 2, column 386, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...hese products vastly and as a result of this adults are growing with poor health whi...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a different manner" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... by these organizations can be utilized in a different manner such as by establishing new libraries, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, i reckon, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1750.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08720930233 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8592595304 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529069767442 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.0941614287 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.615384615 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335800938934 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134470056892 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134486666049 0.0667982634062 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240619495254 0.151304729494 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125323328678 0.056905535591 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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