In some countries, small town-centre shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?
In some nations, more and more people go to shopping in large out-of town stores, so many small town-centre shops are bankrupt. Furthermore, people who do not have cars have difficulties in shopping in out-of-town stores, and it may rise in using cars. While this has various benefits, I think that the drawbacks are outweight its benefits.
On the one hand, shopping in large out-of-town stores can have many advantages. Firstly, this helps out-of-town business to make more profit, which can foster the multi-faced development of remate areas such as economy and tourism,... This causes that people have less incentive to migrate to cities, which makes it easy to solve the burden of population on cities. Secondly, the preference for out-of-town helps the automobile industry grow, because people who do not have cars must buy one to travel to these stores in outskirts. This leads to boost economic growth in there.
On the other hand, I believe there are great drawbacks of this change. The first one is air pollution, since using many cars emits a huge amount od exhaust fumes into the air. This causes that people can catch many diseases about breathing. In addition, heavy traffic jams on the street in outskirts of cities is a serious problem. This can contribute to that people waste time and are late for their works when they are stuck on the street for a long time, which makes them angry and uncomfortable.
In conclusion, there are some advantages of increase in going to shopping in out-of-town stores, but I still believe that its disadvantages are more significant.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98872180451 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70487872738 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563909774436 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.198149165 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7857142857 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393676808873 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134717248986 0.084324248473 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15072174781 0.0667982634062 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269074610516 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154315633404 0.056905535591 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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