In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, many hold the view that it is beneficial to college study when graduates in some high schools choose to travel or work for few years or months before going to universities. However, there is a body of opinion which claims that this will bring about disadvantages to their future learning at college. In this essay I will examine both sides of the debate to seek a conclusion.
To begin with, it is undeniable that travelling for some time may help students expand outlook and then benefit their college learning, since they may come across different kinds of new things during the journey, which can help them better perceive the relevant courses that they are going to select at college. Undoubtedly, it is my trip to London before going to college that enabled me to pick up English, with which I could learn well the subject about the British history.

In addition, working for a year can improve students’ social skills, which are one of the main goals in university. Only at work, can they more often than not be required to collaborate with others in order to complete tasks both perfectly and quickly, which means that the students at workshops can obtain a golden opportunity to learn cooperation.
On the other hand, however, absence from school for a period of time might conceivably harm college studies, since during the gap year students may forget the knowledge that they have acquired in high schools and find it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. Furthermore, young adults may end up never returning to their studies, as they think that it is better to continue in a particular job or to do something completely different from a university course.
To summarize, there is no doubt that there are certainly risks in high school graduates taking time off to travel or work before they go to college. At the same time, nonetheless, during the gap they can also gain knowledge and collaboration, which are of great significance to their further learning. In the final analysis, therefore, one can only conclude that taking a few time to travel or work has more advantages than drawbacks to the soon-to-be college students’ study.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, may, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, in addition, no doubt, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9347826087 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74380639532 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.1598501159 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.333333333 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6666666667 20.7667163134 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173888581436 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677665358256 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052081964084 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1015325762 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499215107733 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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